The comments I liked were ones that were constructive.
It is helpful to know what I'm doing well and what I need to work on for each assignment. By commenting on more than whether or not the reader enjoyed the story, such as how the story was written, grammar, sentence structure, etc. I am able to improve weekly. By doing this, the reader makes their comments memorable.
The comments that speak to me are ones that include something more than the normal feedback. This can be something as simple as a story about themselves and how what I posted relates to their lives (this is especially true for introduction comments).
I need to be doing a better job with my comments. Mine tend to be very generic and not personal when I make them. If I structured them more like the ones I enjoy reading, I think it'll be better practice for myself and more helpful for others.
Showing posts with label Week 5. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 5. Show all posts
Monday, September 28, 2015
Monday, September 21, 2015
Extra Reading Diary: Arabian Nights - Reading B
Myth-Folklore Unit: Arabian Nights
This was one long story, but it was split up into multiple sections and I decided to include my favorite parts in this reading diary post.
Aladdin and the Wonderful Lamp 1
Aladdin and the Magician. Source: Wikimedia
This writing style is fantastic. I like how it keeps the reader engaged and wanting to read more. I also appreciate getting to read the original story, as I have only seen the Disney version. I also like how it cuts off the story before the second part. It leaves so much suspension in the writing and for the reader's imagination.
Aladdin and the Wonderful Lamp 4
This magician has a lot of spite, rage and jealousy. I like how the author truly dove into each of the characters in this story. The development is incredible and really allows the reader to get to know the characters individually and how they work together as a whole. However, this part of the story made me sad because Aladdin lost his entire life. The princess' father was absolutely married into his money and fortune, which was quite unfortunate.
Aladdin and the Wonderful Lamp 6
It seems like the evil wickedness never ends. I enjoy and appreciate that the end of this story was positive and that Aladdin and his wife ended up happy and together. That's rare in a lot of the stories I have read so far, so it was nice to see that happen. Overall, I enjoyed reading this story. Though it was long, it was entertaining from beginning to end. I liked the style because it was easy to follow and to read.
Storytelling for Week 5: From the Diary of the Fox
From the Diary of the Fox
Saturday, July 3rd.
Dearest Diary,
So I had the conversation with my husband. AGAIN.
I don't think we've gone a single night without him asking me how much wit I think I have and me returning the question back at him.
I also don't think he understands what the word 'wit' means. He always says he has SO much, yet isn't even smart enough to change our kid's diapers. He makes me do it! For ALL FIVE of them!
But I really do love him. He's great company to and from our local dining place we feast at every night and he is a wonderful father. He helps clean up, does the shopping and is incredibly sweet to me.
Well, time for bed now. Maybe our conversation tomorrow will be different (HA! One can dream),
Mrs. Fox
Sunday, July 4th.
DIARY!
Okay. First, no the conversation wasn't different (shock).
HOWEVER.
We ran into a tiger tonight! Can you believe that?! In our part of town!
They aren't even supposed to be traveling near our homes.
It's a good thing this tiger wasn't very bright (but are any of them?), because my husband cowered beneath me and left me to get both of us out of trouble.
And to think - he always talks about how much wit he has. Ha.
I talked the tiger into letting us go home, which wasn't very difficult at all. I made up some story about how my husband and I didn't know how to divide our children between us. If I got two and he got three or vice versa. I asked the tiger to meet our children and help us decide. And the tiger BELIEVED IT! How lucky.
We got back to our home and my nice, courageous husband fled to the door without me. I was left alone with a tiger.
Alone.
With a tiger.
Thanks, Mr. Fox.
Lucky for me I had my wit with me and convinced the tiger to let me step inside for a bit and made absolutely sure not to turn my back on him.
Once I got inside, it was all over. The tiger could never fit through our door (though he sure tried)!
From now on I will NEVER let my husband say he's courageous or full of wit. Though he is full of something.
Until next time (because Lord knows there will be a next time),
Mrs. Fox
Author's Note:
In the original story, a fox and his wife travel to find food every night. On their way back, they have the same conversation in which the wife says she doesn't have much wit and the husband says he has plentiful. One night, they were faced with a tiger. The husband cowered and showed no wit, while the wife's wit saved both of their lives and their five children. In the end, not one of them was eaten and the tiger left frustrated.
This story was my inspiration because I truly adored Mrs. Fox's character. She had wit but did not brag about it. She saved her family's lives and she put up with her boastful and cowardly husband.
I chose this writing style because I have used the same one for each of the past week and wanted to try something new. I plan on using the diary style for some of my storybook and wanted to test it out here first.
I picked this image because it is exactly how I imagined Mrs. Fox and her husband looking. Mrs. Fox is on top, looking annoyed, and her husband is cowering beneath her as the original story describes.
Bibliography:
Folklore of the Santal Parganas by Cecil Henry Bompas (1909).
Saturday, July 3rd.
Dearest Diary,
So I had the conversation with my husband. AGAIN.
I don't think we've gone a single night without him asking me how much wit I think I have and me returning the question back at him.
I also don't think he understands what the word 'wit' means. He always says he has SO much, yet isn't even smart enough to change our kid's diapers. He makes me do it! For ALL FIVE of them!
But I really do love him. He's great company to and from our local dining place we feast at every night and he is a wonderful father. He helps clean up, does the shopping and is incredibly sweet to me.
Well, time for bed now. Maybe our conversation tomorrow will be different (HA! One can dream),
Mrs. Fox
Sunday, July 4th.
DIARY!
Okay. First, no the conversation wasn't different (shock).
HOWEVER.
We ran into a tiger tonight! Can you believe that?! In our part of town!
They aren't even supposed to be traveling near our homes.
It's a good thing this tiger wasn't very bright (but are any of them?), because my husband cowered beneath me and left me to get both of us out of trouble.
And to think - he always talks about how much wit he has. Ha.
I talked the tiger into letting us go home, which wasn't very difficult at all. I made up some story about how my husband and I didn't know how to divide our children between us. If I got two and he got three or vice versa. I asked the tiger to meet our children and help us decide. And the tiger BELIEVED IT! How lucky.
We got back to our home and my nice, courageous husband fled to the door without me. I was left alone with a tiger.
Alone.
With a tiger.
Thanks, Mr. Fox.
Lucky for me I had my wit with me and convinced the tiger to let me step inside for a bit and made absolutely sure not to turn my back on him.
Once I got inside, it was all over. The tiger could never fit through our door (though he sure tried)!
From now on I will NEVER let my husband say he's courageous or full of wit. Though he is full of something.
Until next time (because Lord knows there will be a next time),
Mrs. Fox
Foxes. Source: Wikimedia
Author's Note:
In the original story, a fox and his wife travel to find food every night. On their way back, they have the same conversation in which the wife says she doesn't have much wit and the husband says he has plentiful. One night, they were faced with a tiger. The husband cowered and showed no wit, while the wife's wit saved both of their lives and their five children. In the end, not one of them was eaten and the tiger left frustrated.
This story was my inspiration because I truly adored Mrs. Fox's character. She had wit but did not brag about it. She saved her family's lives and she put up with her boastful and cowardly husband.
I chose this writing style because I have used the same one for each of the past week and wanted to try something new. I plan on using the diary style for some of my storybook and wanted to test it out here first.
I picked this image because it is exactly how I imagined Mrs. Fox and her husband looking. Mrs. Fox is on top, looking annoyed, and her husband is cowering beneath her as the original story describes.
Bibliography:
Folklore of the Santal Parganas by Cecil Henry Bompas (1909).
Reading Diary B: Santal Folklore
Reading Diary B: Santal Folklore
The Tigers and the Cat
The story of how the tigers ate the raw meat was interesting. I got frustrated when the tigers blamed the cat for doing something they could've contributed to and helped out with. I also was upset when the tigers killed the dog in the end. If I were to use this as an inspiration for my story, I would change the ending. I don't appreciate how the tigers won in the end. However, I do like the writing style as it was easy to follow. The only downside was that it jumped around a bit.
A Fox and His Wife
I really like the fox's wife in this story. She has great wit but does not boast about it, even when asked. The fox, however, does and does not have a bit of wit to save their lives. She saved both of them and her children, which took a great amount of not only wit, but also courage. I want to write a story with her character in it.
The Brave Jackal
I included this story because I didn't really understand it at first. The writing style was confusing and I had to reread it multiple times before I even slightly comprehended it. My mind might just not be comprehending quickly or even comprehending this style, but I learned that I need to make my writing clear and concise for my readers. I want them to understand everything on the first attempt and not have to reread anything.
The Tigers and the Cat
The story of how the tigers ate the raw meat was interesting. I got frustrated when the tigers blamed the cat for doing something they could've contributed to and helped out with. I also was upset when the tigers killed the dog in the end. If I were to use this as an inspiration for my story, I would change the ending. I don't appreciate how the tigers won in the end. However, I do like the writing style as it was easy to follow. The only downside was that it jumped around a bit.
A Fox and His Wife
I really like the fox's wife in this story. She has great wit but does not boast about it, even when asked. The fox, however, does and does not have a bit of wit to save their lives. She saved both of them and her children, which took a great amount of not only wit, but also courage. I want to write a story with her character in it.
Fox. Source: Wikipedia
The Brave Jackal
I included this story because I didn't really understand it at first. The writing style was confusing and I had to reread it multiple times before I even slightly comprehended it. My mind might just not be comprehending quickly or even comprehending this style, but I learned that I need to make my writing clear and concise for my readers. I want them to understand everything on the first attempt and not have to reread anything.
Reading Diary A: Santal Folklore
Reading Diary A: Santal Folklore
Ledha and the Leopard
I like this story because of the range of characters. I have mixed feelings about Ledha because he is clever, but stayed in the forest without telling anyone. I don't like his sister because it did not mention of her ever going to look for him. I don't like the leopard because he's ungrateful. However, the crow in this story is very clever, which I like. I also appreciate that Ledha went back and helped the buffaloes in the end. I don't think this story is titled well because the leopard exits the tale rather quickly. Ledha and the Buffaloes would be a better name.
The Monkey and the Girl
I included this story as one of my three because of the way it was written. It's more of an example for myself of how I don't wish to write. For me, it was hard to follow, which made it hard for me to stay engaged and entertained. Also this story was really sad and strange. If I were to use this as inspiration to my own story, I would change the outcome and a lot about the original story itself.
The Jackal and the Crow
This story reminded me of the story "The Old Lady Who Swallowed a Fly". I used to read that story as a child, which is why I liked this particular one. However, the jackal really irritated me, which made me dislike the story a little bit. I do appreciate that in the end he got what was coming to him. But I feel bad for all of the creatures he met in between.
Ledha and the Leopard
I like this story because of the range of characters. I have mixed feelings about Ledha because he is clever, but stayed in the forest without telling anyone. I don't like his sister because it did not mention of her ever going to look for him. I don't like the leopard because he's ungrateful. However, the crow in this story is very clever, which I like. I also appreciate that Ledha went back and helped the buffaloes in the end. I don't think this story is titled well because the leopard exits the tale rather quickly. Ledha and the Buffaloes would be a better name.
The Monkey and the Girl
I included this story as one of my three because of the way it was written. It's more of an example for myself of how I don't wish to write. For me, it was hard to follow, which made it hard for me to stay engaged and entertained. Also this story was really sad and strange. If I were to use this as inspiration to my own story, I would change the outcome and a lot about the original story itself.
The Jackal and the Crow
This story reminded me of the story "The Old Lady Who Swallowed a Fly". I used to read that story as a child, which is why I liked this particular one. However, the jackal really irritated me, which made me dislike the story a little bit. I do appreciate that in the end he got what was coming to him. But I feel bad for all of the creatures he met in between.
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